Saturday, March 28, 2009

a lass

i posted a poem close to this a while back but i went back and reread it and decided i didnt work right and that this version is much better
tell me whatch ya think


a lass stits upon a tree
looking down at the mortals be
watching, waiting for her chance
a chance for what you ask your self,
that is a mystery on its own
one that shall be unknown

4 comments:

Opaque said...

Interesting!!! You've got me thinking. I feel there is an underlying message there which is quite intriguing.

Umm, but this line, is this right? -
"one that shall me unknown"

I am just confirming if it is a typo or not.

Keep writing!!!

Blue Rose said...

sorry that was a typo, but its fixed now

Opaque said...

Oh, okay. This is well-written!!!

You've just been awarded!!! Congratulations!!! Visit my spot for the award!!!

The Write Girl said...

Congratulations on the award Black Rose. I enjoyed reading your poem. Thank you for checking out my site as well. : )