yet again, i have a poem

ok i have 2 versions of basically the same poem, the only difference is that one has more to it, abd because of the more it changes the poems meaning.
tell me which one you like better
oh yea and like usall a name you think would work.
1)
she blinks
once, twice, three times
her checks get red
her heart speeds up
her palms start to sweat
it gets harder for her to breath
she blinks back tears
she wants to run
get away from it all
but how can she?
her knees buckle in
she's about to faint
it starts to get darker
she needs to run
she wants to get away
she knows she has to
but can she?
she starts to scream
it gets stuck in her throat
her life is about to be gone
a hand grabs her from behind
it closes around her throat
she screams



2)
she blinks
once, twice, three times
her checks get red
her heart speeds up
her palms start to sweat
it gets harder for her to breath
she blinks back tears
she wants to run
get away from it all
but how can she?
her knees buckle in
she's about to faint
it starts to get darker
she needs to run
she wants to get away
she knows she has to
but can she?
she starts to scream
it gets stuck in her throat
her life is about to be gone
a hand grabs her from behind
it closes around her throat
she screams
ahe bolts awake
sits up in bed
telling her self it was only a dream....
a nightmare
still, she looks everwhere
execpting to see him
seeing nothing
she lays back down
starting to drift off
hes back
watching her
he wants her......badly
and then it happens
she is back in her room
safe, but lost in a confused daze